Looking through my goggles, I see an orange creature swimming gently through the fragile bubbles that surround him. The coral looks so delicate that if I touch it, it would melt around my fingers. Waving to me with his paper-thin fin, he calls me closer to his hiding spot. I run my fingers through the cool water pulling myself closer to him. I reach my hand slowly down into the water in attempt to play with my little orange friend, and I brush against the clear bubbles. As I travel towards the coral, it parts gracefully allowing space for my fingertips to wander. Closer I get to the fish that drew me near, when suddenly, he disappears with one last wave with his feathered fin and vanishes forever.
Monday, October 4, 2010
Underwater Bubbles
Looking through my goggles, I see an orange creature swimming gently through the fragile bubbles that surround him. The coral looks so delicate that if I touch it, it would melt around my fingers. Waving to me with his paper-thin fin, he calls me closer to his hiding spot. I run my fingers through the cool water pulling myself closer to him. I reach my hand slowly down into the water in attempt to play with my little orange friend, and I brush against the clear bubbles. As I travel towards the coral, it parts gracefully allowing space for my fingertips to wander. Closer I get to the fish that drew me near, when suddenly, he disappears with one last wave with his feathered fin and vanishes forever.
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Ms. Spiezio,
ReplyDeleteI love the picture that you used. Also, I really liked your use of adjectives and transitions.
-Ailis F.
Ms. Spiezio that was just beautiful. I loved the way you decribed the coral. How it would melt on your fingers. Also when the fish called me over with its paper thin fin. I thought that was great use of adjectives. Your vivid adjective brightened up the whole story and made the story came alive. I just loved it!!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much ladies! I'm so glad you liked this piece! I can't wait to read more of your writings!
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